功能性文书段落解析(1)

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现在的你也许正满怀憧憬,即将迎来赴美留学的新的申请季,谱写属于你的未来的人生篇章。但是对于多数同学都是第一次了解美国留学申请季,多少有几分忐忑的吧,关于文书入学切入,如何在文书中体现自身的亮点,抓住各大院校招生官的眼球,受到他们的青睐,取得理想的结果。
 
已经八月中旬了哟,19申请季已经开始啦。
你是不是已经开始写自己的文书了呢?
有没有一种抓耳挠腮,忐忑不安的感觉?
关于自己理解的切入点、如何在文书中体现自身的亮点,如何可以写得收招生官的青睐?
 
毕竟中美文化、以及对美国各个院校更偏爱的学生类型不是很了解,可能使得处在申请季的学生感到无从下手,于是就有了这篇文章,我们不妨来看看,这些拿到名校录取的文书段落吧!
 
 
 
Last summer, I was offered a precious opportunity to attend Strata Data Conference in Beijing as a member of THU data research group. Lectures about big data, cutting-edge data science and business analytics gave me access to true front-end data application. Popularization of data science brought new tools for supporting strategy development. The implement of data in real world aroused my strong interest in supporting strategy with data analytics. Besides reviewing research after the meeting, I started to apply the knowledge and techniques into academic practice, sharing insights and thoughts on my personal website: zchi1.com. 
 
参加的数据库大会,让自己见识到了最前沿的数据分析技术和数据应用技术。这一段,自己主要写了行业发展的现状,以及最终确定了对用数据支持商业决策的兴趣,以及开始自己看一些paper,开始注重学术上的应用,并记录在个人网页上。自己对商分的兴趣也就是这样一步步建立起来的。
 
Along this self-studying process, I contacted professor Guo to explore the further possibilities of data implement in my major, who was focusing on IT technology implement in construction industry and urban studies. Statistical computing is prevailing in urban studies realm for analyzing human behaviors. Utilizing social network dataset from Stanford Network Analysis Program, we modeled the displacement distance distribution with Lévy flights, which stands for the random walk with steps following truncated power-law distribution. Beta value of Lévy flights was understood as crowd concentration, shifting significantly during earthquake, providing an important measuring method for disaster prevention and detection. I am now working on my thesis ‘Using social data to analyze the disaster impact on human mobility’ for publishing on SCI journal <Natural Hazards>.
 
这一段落主要围绕自己在建筑管理和城市研究领域运用IT技术的研究,涉及大量数据分析。自己见识了数据分析在专业里,以及其在灾害预测和预防二次灾害里的作用。这里对于研究的工作以一句话概括,重点放在数据分析在这个研究的用途和意义。
 
 
 
 
I participated in several research groups during academic study. One of them was development of fluorescent turn-on probes for hydrogen sulfide, which was a signaling molecule of numerous diseases. My duties in this experience was developing probes through a series of reactions. One major challenge was getting satisfied probes and examining various properties of them through complicated chemical reactions. In order to achieve the goal,I did dozens of experiments to approach the sensitivity and selectivity requirements. Although we accomplished a successful project and this could be a significant experiment if it would apply to clinic medicine in the future, my part of work was limited to an isolated area. Lack of macro broad view of the whole research or engineering process will be a limitation for me. The more experiments and researches I did, the stronger this presentiment grew. As a result, I was eager to find a way to widen my view and future path.
 
作为CV 的reference,PS不需要讲自己在实验中做了什么,可以讲自己在团队中的角色,研究过程中遇到的困难,如何克服,以及从中的收获。这段研究在PS中的作用,除了给自己发表的paper增加了一些丰富形象的主观内容,更重要的作用在最后一句:作为化工专业的学生,逐渐意识到了自己专业的局限,为PS后面的寻求突破而转专业做铺垫。
 
 
读过这篇文章的宝宝们是不是对文书写作内容有了一些实质上的了解呢?
 
 
 
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